Friday, October 24, 2008

The Cigarette

He watched

the delicate lines

around her mouth


as she pulled

one last drag,


the red glow


end over end

onto a pavement


with broken dreams.


June said...

Great symbolism!

Marty said...

A little puff of perfection...

petra michelle; Whose role is it anyway? said...

Love powerful endings such as "...onto a pavement littered with broken dreams." Lovely!

Anonymous said...

I have been lurking for a couple of months enjoying your work. You use such simple phrasing, yet there is such subtle complexity. I believe that is called talent m'dear.

There is such complexity between these few lines. Bravo!

Haroun said...

One more dream stubbed out! In words as magical as life itself!

White Rose said...

Thanks everyone!

petra michelle; Whose role is it anyway? said...

Hope you're having a wonderful weekend, Shellie. Wanted to thank you for your fun comment and vote on The Good... The winners were
Clint Eastwood as Blondie, Jack Palance as Tuco, and Jack Nicholson
as the skellie's voiceover. Hope you enjoy House on Haunted Hill?.
btw, not until now did I realize you had another blog. Am looking forward to visiting! :))

Cynthia said...

Oh, this is soooo good. You feel the deep melancholy mood, with the
few words you've expertly write,
and the form lends to the falling.
Love this Blanca Rosa.

Beatrice V said...

A perfect puff:) White Rose, beautiful

angel said...

Very nice. And I have to say I love your blog, the pictures and background.

paisley said...

i totally love this,, and am i nuts or have you published this before??? i swear to god i have read it before...

White Rose said...

It was on weekend wordsmith.